I read the poem and wrote my interpretation on it before reading what your interpretation was. Then compared them.
DO WATCH critters CRAWLING
Watching people scurry through life to make ends meet. become THEE Skies TIDE TO FLOW
The goal is never reached, as the tide of life moves away from your reach and comes back in crushing your hopes and dreams. ENERGETICALLY CAST LOST LIGHTS
Frantically and endlessly expending energy to reach their dream and seek to repair their destroyed dreams. Always... all of these THINGS?
It always has been, it is always present, and it always shall always be
Suggestion: Be sure to utilize commas and periods in your poetry to create a more emphasis on your words. I really enjoyed your poem.