Python Panda Posted July 11, 2020 Share Posted July 11, 2020 As I'm no longer sure if I want to create this as a game or develop it into a regular story, I have decided to just post it as a concept here and share and get feed back about it. Below you will find the base premise of how the game or story will be about. I will also link in the WIP from years ago from when I was actually still interested in game development. Needless to say from then to know there have been revisions on names and other things. And here is everything so far. Original Game Topic (Not actual original but it is the first game post here. The actual original game post was made on a different site)Calendar and Year Information Spoiler Current Year in Norta: 7265 End of the Story Thus Far: 7350 The current calendar was created by the ancient Druids of Norta. When the druids was the dominant race on Norta, they established the calendar system. Current Calendar of Norta Moon #1: Geal sìorraidh (Eternal White) Moon # 2: Celesterial Luna (Celesterial Moon) The calendar is based off the Celtic calendar. Alternating between 29 and 30 days the year consists of 354 days. The Calendar is based off of druid and Celtic culture. I based the months name off of the table that can be found here. The events(soltices and equinox) are a rough estimate on where they should be based on the time they happen based on the druid tree calendar found here. More research is going on to determine the best day of the best month to actually place these events. They may change the more i dive into the Celtic and druid history and lore. Months Spoiler Anagantios Aodhán is Born and left for dead on the 11th of Angantios in the year 7230 Ogronios The 3rd of Ogronios in the year of 7140, Aodhán's master was born. Cutios Giamonios Simivisonios Equos The 21st of Equos is the Summer Solstice Aodhán's master also passed away on the 21st of Equos in the Year 7265 Elembiuos Edrinios Cantlos The 21st of Cantlos is the Fall Equinox Samonios Dumannios Riuros The 21st of Riuros is the Winter Solstice. The 25th of Riuros Aodhán passes away in the year 7350 Calendar I'm working on can be found here. Characters Spoiler Aodhán Spoiler Aodhán is the current hero. He eventually learns how to communicate with the gods of Norta. Aodhán had no parents and lived as an orphan on the streets of the Rockies region. He was brought up by other kids who had found him in the back of an brothel. The kids taught him how to live by stealing and taking what they wanted. Aodhán ended up taking a liking to the life of thievery and had determined to become the best thief in all of Norta. (Beginning of Story) When Aodhán was 15, Aodhán stole from an elderly man who turned out to be mage. This mage caught Aodhán in the act and decides to make Aodhán his apprentice as he saw talent in the boy even though it was through the act of robbery. TIME SKIPS 20 YEARS (Middle of story) Aodhán is now 35 and his master has passed away. The last thing his master taught Aodhán was how to summon a god named Arlo. Through the interactions of the two, they became great friends. Through this friendship Arlo eventually entrusts the future of Norta in Aodhán's hands. TIME SKIP 85 YEARS (End of the story)(End of Book 1/Version 1.x) Aodhán is now 120 and on the way to a peaceful death. He seeks out the Elves of the Pine Region and pass on his knowledge to them. The elves watch as Aodhán passes from Norta and they continue to talk to Arlo to keep the god company. Hair Style: Short Hair Color: Black with blood red tips Eye Color: Dark Red Height: 5 feet 9 inches Weight: 276 Build: Fit with a little bulk. Birth Year: 7230 BS Current Age: 35 Death Year: 7350 BS Death Age: 120 Social Class: Thief/Mage Education: Thievery and Magic Likes: Enjoys long cold winter days. When no one else is outside. He sees it as pure freedom. Even in his elder years he still enjoyed the cold winter days. Dislikes: Current state of affairs after his training. Afraid of: Dyeing alone with no one remembering who he was. Political View: Due to his teachings in magic by his teacher, he has a hatred for the current kings. Aodhán's Teacher (Currently has no known name) Spoiler Aodhán's teacher is an elderly master magician/druid who has since retired from working with the Axazelum Kingdom. Over the many years he served the king he was tasked to murder many people. It is now at his own elder age that he has come to realize what he has done. He now seeks atonement by helping those who the king ignores or tries to hurt. He meets Aodhán when Aodhán is 15 years old. Aodhán tried to pickpocket him for some coin so he could eat. While dragging Aodhán to the guard post they were transported to a cave. The elderly master was surprised on what had happened as he hasn't met anyone with the ability to travel to a new location before. Eventually the elderly master and Aodhán became a master and student pair. The Mage decided to do this as to hope someone would look after the people of the Axazelum Kingdom when he had passed on. 20 YEARS OF TRAINING: POST DEATH: After Aodhán's teachers death, Aodhán continued his training by helping those around him in the Axazelum Kingdom. Hair Style: Long Hair Color: Dark grey at the roots which get lighter like snow towards the ends. Eye Color: Dark Royal Blue Height: 6 ft 2 inches Weight: 126 pounds Build: Tall and slim. As a mage he never really focused on building up his body strength as he would just rely on magic to get out of situations. Birth Year: Orgronios 3rd 7140 BS Current Age: 105 Death Year: Giamonios 21st 7265 Death Age: 125 Social Class: Mage/Wealthy Education: Magic Likes: Peaceful nights upon the moons shine down upon him. Dislikes: The current state of affairs of Norta. Afraid of: Not passing on his knowledge to help those who are suffering. Political View: Hates all four current kings. Edan Spoiler Edan is the sole survivor of an unnamed village that Flarecender ordered to be burnt down after he burned his wife alive. His body is 70% burnt and scared. His sister gave her life to save his during the Great Burning. He has since traveled aimlessly through the desert region until he fell into an underground druid ruin. Edan stayed there for some time. This ruin is where he met Aodh who was slumbering for the past 2650 years. He meets Aodhán while during the Second Great Burning. Aodhán helps Edan escape with the help of Arlo. During the escape Arlo senses his friend Aodh, who shows up and helps Aodhán and Edan escape Swiftmere. TIMESKIP END OF BOOK 1 Edan has disappeared and no one from the group of Saviors has heard from him in many years. Some say he had passed away with out passing on the knowledge he learned from Aodh. Others say he returned to the druid ruin and is now in hibernation awaiting for the day Aodh and he is needed. Hair: Bald Eye Color: His left eye has been burnt/melted shut. His right eye is fiery red with speckles of blue. Height: 6' 8" Weight: 178 pounds Build: Muscle/Fit Sex: Male Birth Year: 7236 Current Age: 29 Death Year: Unknown Death Age: Unknown Social Class: Orphan/Wonderer/Peasant Education: Self educated through travel Likes: Walking and being alone Dislikes: Crowds Afraid of: Being found by Flarcender and being set a flame again. Political View: Hates the current royal family due to the Great Burning. Cari Spoiler Cari contacts Danu Hair: Eye Color: Height: Weight: Build: Sex: Birth Year: Current Age: Death Year: Death Age: Social Class: Education: Likes: Dislikes: Afraid of: Political View: Aileene Spoiler Contacts Aife Aileene is the first Druid that Aodhán meets. She has been exiled from the Druid city for being able to see images of the future that came true. When she was 125 years old she started her journey through Norta finding the one she had dreamed of that would save Norta. Little did she had met him during his training 15 years ago in the woods of (Insert name of woods here). Aileene and Aodhán first meet during his training 15 years okay when he started as the apprentice of (Insert Aodhán master here). Aodhán had become lost on his first excursion into the wilderness to learn to control his skills with air magic. While lost he came across Aileene who was hiding from some slavers who wanted her for her beauty. It wouldn't be till 15 years later when Aodhán runs into in the City of Axazelum does he learn about druids and what Aileene see's as Aodhán destiny. Through the many adventures they both go on together, they eventually fall in love. Though unknown to Aodhán, Aileene is a druid and is many years older than him and she would most likely out live him. When he did find out she was a druid he was excited and wanted to meet the rest of the druid race as his master would tell him stories of the druid race from the wars past. Hair: Long Golden Blond Eye Color: Dark Forest Green Height: 5' 1" Weight: 115 lbs Build: Skinny Sex: Female Birth Year: 7090 Current Age: 175 Death Year: 402 Death Age: 7492 Social Class: Druid Priestess Education: Druidism/Healer Likes: Calm and cool nights where she is able to look up at the stars of Norta. Dislikes: Current leaders of the druid council. Afraid of: Being forced out of the entire Druid community due to her unique skill of seeing the future. Political View: Has no view on the current human political system due to not knowing much as she was secluded in the pine region for 125 years. She is a dislike of the current druid council as they banished her from the main city. Warrip Spoiler Current Ruler of the Rockies Region. He is a ruthless ruler that implements high taxes to make himself richer. Warrip only cares for money and destroying those who keep him from getting richer. Once Aodhán saves the land of Norta, Warrip was able to stay a king by honor only. He is forced to return the money he had collecting from taxes to the people. He becomes a poor king that has most of his powers taken by a democracy that Kingdom of Axazelum founded. Contacts Demon God: Fukhi TIME SKIP TO NORTA: SALVATION (Book 2/Version 2.x): Was overthrown by... Is last king to be overthrown after the events of Book 1/Version 1.x. Hair: Light Grayish cyan - lime green Color Code for Hair: https://www.colorhexa.com/e9f6ef Eye Color: Very Dark Gray (mostly black) Color Code for Eyes: https://www.colorhexa.com/080808 Height: 6 feet 2 inches Weight: 220 pounds Build: Lean/Muscles Birth Year: 7223 Current Age: 42 Death Year: 7314 Death Age: 91 Social Class: King Education: Politics, Finances, Military Likes: Money Dislikes: Oweing people money Afraid of: Being poor with no power. Political View: Taxation to save the kingdom. Snarsusk of the Dark Spoiler Current Ruler of the Pine Region. He wants everyone in his domain to bow down and serve him to death. He takes great joy in taking people lives, especially those who he deems to be a threat to him. Mostly adult males. Due to the many killings he does the Pine region population has been severely reduced over his regain. Contacts Gameran Hair: Eye Color: Height: Weight: Build: Birth Year: Current Age: Death Year: Social Class: Education: Likes: Dislikes: Afraid of: Political View: Wavesoak The Drowner Spoiler Wavesoak The Drowner received his name after he was invaded by an unknown enemy. He flooded the entire capital to save his regain, with no regard for his own men or citizens that were stuck. Those that survived was tortured for information then publicly drowned. Due to this unknown enemy, Wavesoak got it in his head everyone was out to kill him and to take over his kingdom. Thus he started to hold public drownings once a week. He would have his personal guards pick random people with fake charges and drown them in the city square. He was able to contact Guznar. Hair: Eye Color: Height: Weight: Build: Birth Year: Current Age: Death Year: Social Class: Education: Likes: Dislikes: Afraid of: Political View: Flarcender Spoiler Current Ruler of the Desert Region. He lost his two sons to a plague that hit the desert region over 15 years ago. Since then if he learned of someone who was sick, the would have that entire family and their house burned to stop them from spreading any kind of sickness. Eventually though burning people he burnt his own wife. Once he realized what he has done, he ordered the entire kingdom to be set a flame. Once Aodhán saves the land of Norta, Flarecender goes underground and forms the League of Ancients to keep the hopes of the Four Kings alive. Contacted: Searumal Hair: Amber Red Color Code for Hair: https://www.colorhexa.com/891522 Eye Color: Hazel Color Code for Eyes: https://www.colorhexa.com/76a898 Height: 5 ft 5 inches Weight: 129 lbs Build: Lean/Muscle Birth Year: 7200 BS Current Age: 65 Death Year: 7283 BS Death Age: 83 Social Class: King Education: Military, Politics Likes: Burning things Dislikes: Plagues Afraid of: Disease spreading Political View: Burn it all to Embers. Gods and Demons Spoiler Arlo Spoiler Pronounced - ar-loh Meaning: Between two highlands Arlo is the god of Air. He is the god which created the Rockies region of Norta. Aodhán is the first person to contact and talk to Arlo in over 1500 years. Through his interactions with Aodhán, he became friends with Aodhán and eventually asks Aodhán to save Norta from certain doom. TIME SKIP TO Aodhán'S DEATH Arlo eventually watches his friend Aodhán pass from this world. Aodhán summoned Arlo one last time before he passed away. He let Arlo know that he shall not be alone ever again as the elves have agreed to talk and become Arlo friend in place of Aodhán. TIME SKIP TO BOOK 2 NORTA: SALVATION/Version 2.x Arlo is trapped. Hair: Wavey Red with Blue highlights Color Code of Hair Red: https://www.colorhexa.com/990000 Color Code of Hair Blue: https://www.colorhexa.com/003b6f Eye Color: White with speckles of green, blue and red. Color Code for Eyes Green: https://www.colorhexa.com/2c5e00 Color Code of Eyes Blue: https://www.colorhexa.com/17b7ff Color Code of Eyes Red: https://www.colorhexa.com/ff2c00 Height: 5' 11" Weight: 162 lbs Build: On the heavier side. Though he seems to be some what in shape but not really. Sex: Male Birth Year: Unknown Current Age: Unknown Death Year: Unknown Social Class: God Education: None Likes: Winter and cold breezes. Dislikes: Water Afraid of: Heat and Water Political View: None Aodh Spoiler Pronunciation: Meaning: Fire, element Has been slumbering since the year 4615. The druids and humans have forgotten about his oasis underground of The Devils Kingdom. God of Fire Contacted by people in the Desert Region. Hair: Hair is a wavey sandy material that keeps flowing downwards. Color Code for Hair: https://www.colorhexa.com/dbd1b4 Eye Color: Firebrick Color Code for Eye Color: https://www.colorhexa.com/b22222 Height: 4' 6" Weight: 95 lbs Build: Muscle/Skinny Sex: Male Birth Year: Unkown Current Age: Unkown Death Year: Unknown Death Age: Unkown Social Class: God Education: None Likes: Fire and dry weather Dislikes: Cool/Cold weather Afraid of: Water Political View: None Danu Spoiler Pronunciation: Meaning: River contacted by the Gulf Region God of Water Hair: Flowing Deep Blue Water Color Code for Hair: https://www.colorhexa.com/004d6d Eye Color: Deep Green Color Code for Eyes: https://www.colorhexa.com/045206 Height: 6' 9" Weight: 275 lbs Build: Ability to change its form due to being made pure/holy water. Though Danu is usually seen in a female form that is thicker/curvy. Sex: Multi/Mainly female though is known to turn into a guys body to play pranks on people. Birth Year: Unknown Current Age: Unknown Death Year:Unknown Death Age: Unknown Social Class: God Education: None Likes: Lakes, Oceans, Rivers Dislikes: Land Afraid of: Fire/Heat Political View: None Aife Spoiler Pronunciation: Meaning: beautiful/radiant Contacted by the Pine Region God of Earth Hair: Mixture of multicolored leaves, grass and vines. Eye Color: Changes color depending on the season/mood Summer/Love: Vivd Red Color Code for Summer/Love: https://www.colorhexa.com/da4820 Winter/Bitter: Snow Color code for Winter/Bitter: https://www.colorhexa.com/fffafa Spring/Relaxing: Forest Green Color Code for Spring/Relaxing: https://www.colorhexa.com/228b22 Autumn/Hatred: Redish brown Color code for Autumn/Hatred: https://www.colorhexa.com/7b1e17 Height: 5' 7" Weight: 185 lbs Build: Skinny Sex: Female Birth Year: Unknown Current Age: Unknown Death Year: Unknown Death Age: unknown Social Class: God Education: None Likes: Cool breeze of the spring. Dislikes: being to warm Afraid of: Fire Political View: None Searumal Spoiler Pronunciation: Sear-u-mal Demon of Fire Contacted by King of Desert Region: Flarecender Searumal is also known as the keeper of the gates. She is charge of the gates of the underworld. Out of the four demons she is the most level headed. Though she enjoys torment and burning things a live, she also has a job in which takes up a lot of her time. Making sure the souls go to the correct location of the underworld. Though while doing this job she may end up burning the souls alive. In the millennia of her being in the position of gate keeper she has tortured more souls than any other demon. Hair: Bright blue flowing fire. Spikey Color Code for Hair: https://www.colorhexa.com/3e8cff Eye Color: Pitch Black Color code for Eyes: https://www.colorhexa.com/000000 Height: 5' 6" Weight: 175 Build: Fit Sex: Female Birth Year: Unknown Current Age: Unknown Death Year: Unknown Death Age: Unknown Social Class: Demon Education: Unknown Likes: Burning things a live Dislikes: Cool/Cold Afraid of: Water/Snow Political View: Death and Destruction to rule. Guznar Spoiler Pronunciation: Guz-na Contacted by Gulf Region King: Wavesoak the Drowner Demon God of water Guzna has spent the last 500 years wrecking havoc on the oceans of Norta. He forces the seas to go out of control to sink boats and to claim the souls of the sailors and merchants on the ships. Due to these 500 Years a lot of merchants have started land trade routes or using smaller ships that can sail closer to the coast. Hair: Flowing dark/dirty water that drips tainted/impure/infected water. Color Code for Hair: https://www.colorhexa.com/083b37 Eye Color: Pitch Black Color Code of Eyes: https://www.colorhexa.com/000000 Height: 4' 8" Weight: 220lbs Build: Fat, Though he is able to change shape due to being made up of water, Guznar enjoys being fatter. Though when he is pissed and is in a pinch he will go into a more lean/fighting look. Color Code for Body: https://www.colorhexa.com/08263b Sex: Male Birth Year: Unknown Current Age: Unknown Death Year: Unknown Social Class: Demon Education: Unknown Likes: Drowning souls over and over as punishment. Dislikes: Land Afraid of: Fire Political View: Rule by fear of drowning Gamran Spoiler Pronunciation: Game-ran Contacted by Pine Region: Sanaredusk of the Dark Demon of Earth/Land Gameran is the current ruler of the four demons. He stole the Kingship from Fukhi over 1000 years ago. Gameran enjoys possessing trees and brush that are on the verge of death to compel humans to destroy more of the land. Hair: Dead leaves, twigs, grass Color of hair is multi colored. Mostly darker colors that would go with leaves, twigs and dead grass. Eye Color: Pitch Black Color Code for Eyes: https://www.colorhexa.com/000000 Height: 6' 2" Weight: 243 lbs Build: Semi fit/fat. On the verge of having a gut but still have the lines of a six pack. Sex: Male Birth Year: Unknown Current Age: Unknown Death Year: Unknown Death Age: Unknown Social Class: Demon Education: None Likes: Darkness, Burnt forests, dead land Dislikes: Life Afraid of: Living plants, healthy trees. Political View: None Fukhi Spoiler Pronunciation: Fu-k-hi Contacted by Rockies Ruler: Warrip Demon of Air Fukhi is one of the most secret of the four demons. Due to losing the Queen of demons to the new King of the demons Gameran, she lost trust in everyone around her. He dominion in the underworld has shrunk considerably and she is unable to keep her minions in line to keep order in her dominion. Gameran betrayed her when she let him get close to her cause of this, she keeps to her self and does not let anyone get close to her. Fukhi is the only demon that has no political agenda on the mortal realm of Norta. She only wants to regain her spot of the Queen of Demons using Warrip as her means to do so. Hair: Flowing Black hair with a little shine to it Color code of Hair: https://www.colorhexa.com/1c1c1c Eye Color: Pitch Black Color Code of Eyes: https://www.colorhexa.com/000000 Height: 5'5" Weight: 125 lbs Build: Curvy/thick Sex: Women Birth Year: Unknown Current Age: Unknown Death Year: Unknown Social Class: Demon Education: None Likes: Unknown Dislikes: Unknown Afraid of: Unknown Political View: None Races and Spoken Languages Spoiler Humans Spoiler Humans once was out populated by the Druids. During the 800 years before Norta Fields of War the population of Humans increased to over populate the druids. During the wars each of the Human ran regions would create alliances. Though these alliances never lasted long enough for anyone to actually help one side. TIME SKIP 400 Years The Druids people eventually stopped attacking the humans which made the humans focus on each other. Since the Druids left the battles they eventually just became myths. TIME SKIP CURRENT Aodhán TIME Druids are still myths in the Pine Region. Aodhán eventually meets an druid girl who eventually brings Aodhán to the druid people and they become friends. Humanoid: Yes Life Span: 80 - 130 Years (Those who know magic tend to live longer) Religion: Believe in god/gods No sub species are known to exist till the second book/version 2.x when the new hero rises as a half druid/half human. Druid Spoiler Once the dominant race of Norta. Due to 800 years of war with the humans have diminished their society. They are now secluded deep in the Pine region. The druid people are now just myths to humans and are only remembered through stories of old wars. Druids look exactly like humans. The biggest difference is that druids live way longer due to the connection to the world and nature they have. The second difference are druids are able to blend in with their environment that they have affiliation with. Before the 800 years of ware there were Druids in all four regions. With the affiliation of each region. Though today all four races of the druids are thought to be extinct or just tales parents tell their children to keep them from wondering to far from the town or city. After Aodhán passes they stay in contact with Augh'Undo as it was Shea's last wish. Shea did not want his friend to be lonely so he passed on his knowledge of communicating and summoning Arlo to the druids. This gave the druids the ability to talk to both Aife and Arlo. Ruling Body: The center and ruling body of the Druids is the Council of Naoi. The council is made up of the eldest druids. What they say is law and most be obeyed. The Council of Naoi is responsible for the exile of Aileene due to her visions of the future she had always had. TIME SKIP TO NORTA: SALVATION (Book 2/Later Chapters of Book1? IDK yet): Arlo trains the half druid/half human child through out his first 150 years of life. Eventually Arlo disappears and the new hero goes on a journey to find Arlo. (new hero) eventually finds out he was sealed away by the demon Fukhi and his followers. Thus the journey to save Norta and Augh'Undo begins again. Humanoid: Yes Life Span: 400+ Years Religion: Spiritual Sub Species: Half Druid/Half human: Extinct during current time. By end of first book the first half druid is born. Gerelk Spoiler Pronunciation: Ger-elk This is the unknown third race of Norta. 15 years ago they attacked the Gulf Region. They were defeated and no one has seen them since then. They live in the ocean off the coast of the Gulf region roughly 100 miles off sure and about 800 feet down in a crack in the mantle of the earth. They are introduced in Book 2 (Norta: Salvation)/Version 2.x Spoken Languages English by Humans and Druid Scottish Gaelic Mostly Druid and some Humans who have met an druid. Unknown language is the language of the Gerelk. No one knows what it is called nor knows how to speak or understand it. Regions/Cities/Towns/Maps Spoiler Pine Region/Rìoghachd na Beatha (Kingdom of Life) Spoiler The pine region is one of dense thick forests with lore as old as time. It holds secrets to the Druid race along with the origin of all magic known to man today. The Pine Region is where the Druids live and have been thriving for the past (Insert number of Years here). Due to the thickness of the woods in the center they have been able to hide themselves from the rest of the world. On the upper left of the pine region you will find the capital city of Imna Dorthore. Imna Dorthore is a coastal city that thrives on its export of wood and grains. They are the wealthiest city in all of Norta. This is because of how well defended it is. No one is able to traverse the massive forests and survive. Thus the only way to attack the city is from the sea. With the abundance of wood they have been able to fortify their coastal area of the city. Imna Dorthore Spoiler Area Name: Imna Dorthore Type of Area: Main City Size of Area: Large Growth: Decreasing Government: Disliked Crime Rate: Medium Cost of Living: Expensive Appearance: Upkeep: Clean Population: 30000 Attitude towards visitors: Suspicious of anyone not from the Pine Region Imna Dorthore is the wealthiest city of all of Norta. With its protection from an unpenetrable forest to the west and a fortified port to the east. It exports about 90% of all the wood that the desert region uses for building. This huge export has allowed them to create a huge economic advantage to all other regions. Imna Dorthore was built by the elven people a long time ago. So the structures are influenced by elven design. Though the elves may not reside in their home city anymore the architecture has not changed that much. All structures are made of wood with arches for any doorway or window. Many building are integrated into massive trees. There are many towers throughout the city that the humans converted into look outs to make sure that the city is safe. Desert Region/ The Devils Kingdom Spoiler Towns: 1. Swiftmere Cities: 1. Devils Fork The desert region of Norta is a baren desalet area. Many towns and cities have collapsed and are now just ruins. With no hope in site a lot of people are moving to different regions to find a better life. Devils Fork Spoiler Area Name: Devils Fork Type of Area: Main City Size of Area: Large Growth: Stagnant Government: Hated Crime Rate: High Cost of Living: Very Expensive Appearance: Upkeep: Clean Population: 31000 Attitude towards visitors: Suspicious of anyone not from Devils Fork. Swiftmere Spoiler Area Name: Swiftmere Type of Area: City Size of Area: Small Growth: Increasing Government: Liked Crime Rate: Low Cost of Living: Cheap Appearance: Upkeep: Dirty Population: 1350 Attitude towards visitors: Accepting Rockies Region/Kingdom of Axazelum Spoiler Towns: 1. Oakencross Cities: 1. Axazelum - Capital city of the Axazelum Kingdom The Rockies Region is a mountains terrain. You will find Axazelum Kingdom in the center on top of the highest peak Axazelum. This region is known for its huge surplus of all kind of ore. The most precious ore is Aclite. Axazelum Spoiler Area Name: Axazelum Type of Area: Main City of the Rockies Region Size of Area: Large Growth: Increasing Government: Neutral Crime Rate: Low Cost of Living: Very Expensive Appearance: Upkeep: Clean Population: 23,000 Attitude towards visitors: Accepting The Kingdom of Axazelum was built in the center of a giant mountain forest and is truly a state-of-the-art human phenomenon. Its charm is matched by the backdrop of snowy mountains which have helped shape the city to what it is today. The materials these mountains brought were of great importance, but they were also influential when it came to architectural designs as the vast majority of buildings were designed with shapes and elements found in the mountains. The skyline is spreading with peaks of mountains and even from afar they manage to display their beauty. Recreation is impeccable in Axazelum Kingdom and it has attracted a lot of attention. Countless cultures have left their mark not just on education, but also upon the city's identity. What historically was a city of no variation has grown into a large melting pot and it's this that unites the thousands people to this day. It's this multicultural identity that has truly left its mark. Hundreds of concession stands, coffeehouses and sandwich bars offer a plethora of culinary choices and those who feel hungry for something else can enjoy tours, dance, one of the many parks or one of the many other recreational venues. Oakencross Spoiler Area Name: Oakencross Type of Area: City Size of Area: Medium Growth: Stagnant Government: Disliked Crime Rate: Medium Cost of Living: Expensive Appearance: Upkeep: Well Kept Population: 6922 Attitude towards visitors: Accepting Gulf Region/ Kingdom of the Falls Spoiler Cities: 1. Knavist Falls - Capital City. Towns: 1. Stormhallow The gulf region is located in the south east of Norta. It is second wealthiest region of Norta due to the ability to trade with all the rivers and easy access to the ocean from pretty much any part of the region. You will find Knavist Falls in the middle of the Gulf Region. It surrounded by waterfalls and a labyrinth of rivers leading to the sea. Knavist Falls Spoiler Area Name: Knavist Falls Type of Area: Main city of the Gulf Region Size of Area: Large Growth: Decreasing Government: Hated Crime Rate: High Cost of Living: Very Expensive Appearance: Upkeep: Well Kept Population: 16,689 Attitude towards visitors: Suspicious/No trust to outsiders of the gulf region. The city of Knavist Falls was built along the banks of a labyrinth of rivers and is truly an overgrowing phenomenon. Its elegance is matched by the backdrop of over flowing falls which have helped shape the city to what it is today. The trade resources these seas brought were of great importance, but they were also influential when it came to trading the sea and waterfalls and rivers played a huge step in making trade routes possible. The skyline is scattered with various waterfalls along with rivers. The quality of life is high in Knavist Falls and it has attracted a lot of attention. Stormhallow Spoiler Area Name: Stormhallow Type of Area: Town Size of Area: Medium Growth: Increasing Government: Neutral Crime Rate: Medium Cost of Living: Cheap Appearance: Upkeep: Clean Population: 462 Attitude towards visitors: Accepting Map (work in progress) Spoiler Ainz Ooal Gown 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Python Panda Posted September 7, 2020 Author Share Posted September 7, 2020 Chapter 1 (WIP) Word Count: 797/1000 (Word count includes the "Insert Name of Character" as well. Spoiler I was found alone on the back steps of a brothel on a stormy night inside of Axazelum. “Insert Name of Character” found me and brought me to a small band of orphans. This group raised me and taught me how to survive. After the first few years, I ended with the name Aodhán. I was able to pick things up that “Insert Name of Character” was able to teach me pretty quick. Before I knew it, I was one of the best thief in our small family. I was able to make sure everyone had food on the table and a little coin in their pockets. It was like I was thrown out by some whore so I could help this family I was brought up in. I would go out early in the morning to pickpocket the drunks who were stumbling home from a night of drinking. By the time the shops were opening up, I’d have enough coins for two or three nights at the local hostel that we would stay out once in a while. By the afternoon when the others would be awake, we would start running scams on the merchants of Axazelum. Two of us would distract the merchant while the others would nab items that we needed for that week. Everything was okay for a good long time. My family and I always found a way to make it to the end of the day with a full bully and a little bit of coin to make sure we could have a place to lay our heads at night. During this time I decided I’d become a master thief. I dedicated my days and early mornings in practicing my trade. I wanted to become the best thief in all of Norta. We did this for many years, well till I was fifteen. During a nice spring day, I was making my rounds among the crowds in the market. I attempted to pickpocket an elderly man and he caught me! In all my years, I had never been caught. The guards have never even been able to catch me. I was astonished that this old man was able to get me right after I put my hand in his pocket. As I struggled to get away from his grasp of my wrist that was still in his pocket, I ran through my motions I used to get in his pocket. I couldn’t find where I messed up. During a small amount of time, I became dizzy and there was a bright light and a huge amount of pressure on my chest which made me pass out. When I awoke we were in a very dark and damp place. The old man had already let me go and was on the far side of the dark enclosed space muttering some things to himself. The old man stopped talking to himself and then in a very clear voice said, “Leig solas sealltainn an t-slighe”. All of the sudden there was a small orb of light emitting from this palm. This is when I saw that we were in a cave. The old man started to laugh and seemed to be pleased with what just happened. As he looked at me, he smiled and mentioned about finding the person he had been looking for. As I never in my life even heard of the language he spoke nor even saw magic in my life, I became afraid and could only think about getting back to my family. As he started to walk towards me, I shuddered in fear. As he was only a few feet away, I panicked and yelled at him to stay back and then the next thing I knew everything went blank and the pressure from before was back. When I came to, I was back in Axazelum. I ran home to my brothers and sister. When I arrived, no one was there. It looked like no one had lived there for a few years. I walked around to see what was going on. When I came to my room I noticed a light that was coming from beneath the door. I slowly opened the door and saw a figure standing in the corner. He started to walk towards the light. While he was walking he started to mutter some words very softly. What I heard froze me in place. When the face was in the light I was stricken with fear. It was the old man. He looked at me and said it again. “It's about time you showed up.” Things that need to be updated and worked on for chapter 1 I need to update Shea to the correct new name after the name change. (Aodhán) I need to expand on the upbringing of the main character and introduce him better. I need to figure out a name for the old man and the person who found him and raised him. Anything else that may be pointed out in the more reviews people point out. Chapter 2 (Not Started) Spoiler Concept of chapter 2: Chapter 2 shows Aodhán's journey in learning how to control the forbidden magic his late master taught him. Through the journey he meets an unknown character who ends up being his best friend/wife. (character is a Druid Priestess) Chapter 3 (Not Started) Spoiler Concept of Chapter 3: Aodhán and his druid friend learn about the plot of the 4 kings and learns the truth of what is happening in the world. He then begins to attempt build up a resistance to the current rulers and their plans. Chapter 4 (Not Started) Spoiler Concept of Chapter 4: Aodhán and his druid friend learn about the plot of the 4 kings and learns the truth of what is happening in the world. He then begins to attempt build up a resistance to the current rulers and their plans. Chapter 5 (Not Started) (End of Book 1) Spoiler Concept of Chapter 5: Aodhán is able to form a resistance and plans out how to defeat all 4 kings. The fields of war have been determined. Can Aodhán and his resistance over come their issues. Additional Information: Each chapter will be no less than 1000 words. If needed more chapters may be added down the road. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beast Boyz Posted September 7, 2020 Share Posted September 7, 2020 Hi, i've looked about your story and universe and if you want some feedback about it here : -Not sure if intended but in the chapter 1 we don't even get to know the main character name. -One chapter is to little to judge anything, but if you plan to do more, I cannot recommend you enough to plan ahead and to develop what is interesting to you. The years of pickpocketing must have influenced his behavior and development in the more or less long term. -For the universe, i can''t tell much, there is a lot of name wich still use elf instead of druids and there isn't enough matter to get a good idea of what to expect next. If recommand you to continue writing. Practice, develop your universe, what make it unique and will make us as reader stay and go to the end of the story. Here's also some site which can help you : https://azgaar.github.io/Fantasy-Map-Generator/ : A very very good customisable map generator https://inkarnate.com/ to make very nice map (Not random) http://dndspeak.com/ A lot of ideas to pick to inspire yourself and fill in your world. https://hobbylark.com/writing/Creating-a-New-Fantasy-Race About races creation and giving more realism to it. https://www.artstation.com/contests/ancient-civilizations/challenges/14 and a good site with artwork to get more ideas. Also, i strongly recommand you to find unique features for your story and universe. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Python Panda Posted September 8, 2020 Author Share Posted September 8, 2020 1 hour ago, Beast Realm said: -For the universe, i can''t tell much, there is a lot of name which still use elf instead of druids and there isn't enough matter to get a good idea of what to expect next. As for the names that are still elf they will change over time. Just takes a while for me to actually sit down to edit and update things. But either way I'd like to share what I have so I can get feedback and suggestions on how to improve something. So I appreciate your entire post. The name was left out as I stopped last night and was tired. I've started to go back through and write down ideas on how to make what I have written better already. I'm hoping to have it updated in a few weeks after I fix some other things in my world so far. The reason why what I have is so little in detail is from researching on how to do writing and talking to those that I know who do write (fan fictions or for personal hobby) have all mentioned to just start writing then go back and edit and improve on what you originally wrote done. So everything will be more developed by the next time I update things. Like how the pick pocketing and living on the streets influenced the characters life, behavior etc etc. I'm using Wonderdraft for mapping. It runs native on Linux. I'm still learning how to use it and the map will be updated later down the road. I went with Wonderdraft for the pricing and no monthly or yearly sub like Inkarnate. Yes it has a free version but it is limited and last I tried it, does not allow custom assets. I do appreciate the other links as well. It does give some more things to check out and help develop my world. I use to be a programmer by trade. Though Have always wanted to to finish this story to the end. I lost the passion to do programming roughly two years ago but i have continued on working little by little on this and want to get it finished. As I'm not great at writing it will take some time, though all feedback, suggestions, and help is all appreciated. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Python Panda Posted September 14, 2020 Author Share Posted September 14, 2020 I have updated the first post again. I have updated some of the names and added a few new ones. I'm slowly working on using more Celtic names than Fantasy names. Don't get me wrong, this is a fictional story so some names (mostly the evil kings) will still be elvish/fantasy like. I just really fascinated by the Celtic and Druid culture. It is something I have been looking into for a few months now and really like it and enjoy learning about. I have expanded chapter 1. You can see it here. It still a long way away from being complete. I'm only at 767 words and I still feel like the intro is being rushed. Not to mention I need to expand on how I introduce the main characters name. Its super simple and lame in my eyes. Bur for now for revision 2, I feel like it will do for now. So let me know what y'all think about the changes. Chapters will be a minimum of 1000 words. This will put the story at a minimum of 5000 words. This will put it into a short story categorizations from some searching on google. My end goal is to develop the short story into something bigger with responses from y'all here, friends from discords servers and possibility of sites actually more geared for writing and sharing stories. The end goal is to get within the categorization of a Fantasy Novel which can be up towards 90,000 to 120,000 words. Though that is the end goal. And with help from everyone I think I'll get there as long as I focus... (Focus is the hard part lol) As far as a schedule, I'm hoping to update the chapter and or current released information/lore/background of my world once a week. Either on Sundays or Mondays. This way I don't feel super rushed with trying to do something big once a day. Giving myself a week to update things will allow for me to do better research on parts that still need some better research and ability to add in more lore and back stories on the characters and gods and demons. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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